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之前发了学生的一篇作文,想问问大家什么水平,结果大家的关注点都是字太丑
这次的作业总算字迹清楚点(标点依旧无力吐槽),再发上来给大家看看。
学生实际年龄等于国内五升六,从小国际学校加留学一年,但每次看他交上来的作业有点一言难尽啊……国内同龄孩子能到这水平吗?
楼主自己的娃还小,不了解这个年龄段孩子的学习情况,求客观评价。
老师的评论供参考
General: Good work following the PEE structure. Your main area of improvement is accuracy of language and being specific with evidence.
Introduction - make sure you have a separate introduction - at the moment you just have 3 paragraphs of arguments. However, these paragraphs have a clear subject which is very good to see.
You don't need to say 'I said that because...' in an essay. You can just provide the evidence: e.g. he got 97% on Maths, 95% in English ....
Punctuation is really an area of work. You are using splicing commas e.g. 'he is really self disciplined, I said that because' and at times missing out punctuation all together e.g. 'some sports I said'
Verb tenses/endingss also need work - e.g. 'choosed (chose), 'help' (helps).
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